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heres an article from cnn whuch confirms that a large planet size object has been found though they haven't as yet labelled it as planet http://www.cnn.com/2005/TECH/space/07/30/new.planet/index.html

you know how in the perfume department they hand out little cardboard cutouts of the perfume sprayed with the scent? those are what i use.

tsk tsk tsk naughty sirmyk - picking on young uns', shame on you lol. :p

yep me too. i love the word skulked so visual. sirmyk makes some fair points but i didn't find his version as gripping for some weird reason. all the toos at the beginning - i do agree that writing wise they are too many but as reader it showed me how busy the parents were- like they drove that...

because i like bright shiny things.

i didn't really see much difference between the two style. they boh kinda sounded similar. if u gonna use first person then u should make more use of that technique. wiv first person u can show a persons feelings and thoughts better. the start of it didn't ring true to me - "I ran through...

ooooooohhhhhh those darn birds crapped my car also, and i gotta say your story gave me a feeling of quiet controlled maniacal anger which i totally got.

the big fat hen

yw Seiously tho i meant it that i was curios to see what happened next and i would be willing to read more. it'd be cool to help with the title but cos i don't know what happens in the story i cant make a suggestion. people will give a reply i'm new but from some of the other threads i've...

oh and by the way though i liked the writing thought the title was kinda weak

Interesting.at times it felt like song lyrics.definetly emotional.

...of George Bushs brain..

not the pitts I have to say I did want to keep reading on as it left me curios so thats good. i found some of the dialouge a little confusing at first but then i got that that was the way the characters where. could u tell me whar genre it is?