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Anyway.. I have listened to other criticism and hope that my writing is getting better. I still have loads more to post. However i am finding it difficult to break the habit of over using my adverbs. The story has been fun to write so far and it seems to be evolving on its own. I'm rambling...

I guess your right. Creative criticism has much more impact then abusive critcism. I'm sure his writing is at a much higher standard. ;)

Lol. At first i thought that was a harsh response, then i looked at other comments you have posted. I think you kinda liked it ;)

It is only chapter 1. Not the story. I haven't pasted the whole story.

Just a quick one...what do people think so far ;)

For someone whos not qualified to critique.. you sure had plenty to say. I beleive you know more the you let on. Modesty, a true attribute. However i thought that the poem stayed fluid and made you appreciate the feelings of the individuals that you portrayed. Well written, keep it up...

luv the poem. Write some more ;)

i haven't posted for a while...hello again everyone. So far what's the general feedback on the storyline?

another bit.... I know that it still needs a lot of editing, yet would like to know if you think the story has merit so far. Sam couldn’t focus, rain and tears blurred his vision. His head spun wildly as he tried to cope with the atrocities of the night he had endured. The road had become a...

the next bit... Bill Cursy was 27. He looked upon himself to be considerate with a keen eye to detail. His imagination was very vivid, which helped considerably with his artistic nature. ‘Yet another work of art to perform.’ A lot needed preparing. The house looked different, lived in...

Thank you for the honest reply..and the link. I will try to use less adverbs. I can see how it ruins the pace of the story and have already noticed that it needs to be more fluid. Just adjusted it for spelling mistakes..... I sometimes find it hard to spot the mistakes when reading it...

Well there you go.. So. There is the first two pages. The book is called Bandwidth...and i've written quite a bit more....Please let me know your honest veiws. :)

Ty :) Here goes The clock that sat on the corner of a large oak desk was ticking monotonously, broken only by the rapping of finger tips on keys as Sam Eden typed in his e-mail address in yet another website hosting all forms of bizarre porn from Fisting to golden showers. Waiting while the...

I am writing a book at the moment, but am very new to this. So far i think it's going well but would appreciate some feed back on the book. So far I have written in excess of 17,000 words and would like to see how people like it so far. Is there a way i can upload the document so those that want...