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line 6 'And they way they quietly sit and chat with us.' should be 'And the way they quietly sit and chat with us.'

what you did is actually closer to a ballad. Only you took the corona approach of unifying the poem. A ballad is usually three stanzas, of any length, and what have you, as long as each stanza shares a common structure. The romantics took that form and ran with it. Some think the ballad is the...

Okay, for clarity. A sonnet can be anything in spirit. Many write poems that are considered a sonnet but don't fit the forms requirements of lines, rhymes, and meter. And a sonnet is related to a ballad. All it means, is that their is a set structure, which you did eight line stanzas instead of...

lol, yeah it sure helps. And thanks for the compliments, I do say I'm getting better. But I've only been writing for a couple years. Your words are a testament. May the form be with you, too.;) Here's another poem, only I just wrote it. Hot off the press. Just four sixains without forcing...

Here, I wrote another pantoum, only I want to point something special out. In the world of pantoum, it is totally acceptable to alter the lines a little when you repeat them. The rule of thumb is that it doesn't change the line's overall meaning. See if you can spot the little changes, but...

And here's one in the fashion of a 'rondeau redouble' _______________________ The Little Archer’s Mischief Love's arrows strike unannounced, In such a mysterious way, Though many know not how, They don't forget the day. So many have fallen prey To the little archer's pounce, For they...

sigh... how beautiful, and touching. And i like how you adapted the form, very well done.

on a lighter note... The Rouge I am the fleeting glimpse, a thief in the night, the one who comes to steal, when I'm fighting to survive, I am the rouge mouse. The Little Lions Fierce little creatures, Who buzz about roaring, Stalking for flowers, Yet quick to make threat, But usually...

The length of a pantoum is vital, but how i do it, I just refuse to give up until it works and works well. If you're patient, pantoums really pay off; in theory. As for form, it's one of my greatest joys, it's kind of like we share the experience of the old pastimes with the mother of the arts...

Thank you very much. The form was a good fit too, it was a body of quatrains, with an ending couplet that rhymes with the penultimate stanza to wrap it up, because throughout the poem, it carries a varied rhyme pattern that freed up its cadence. (I didn't want to have a set rhyme scheme, because...

here's another one... i feel it goes well with the last couple. ______________ The World Next to Me Sometimes, when I’m lying in bed, I visit a world perfect and serene I don’t know if it’s the sheer beauty That draws me into its depths, The way the friendly light beckons me To let...

here's one i wrote a while back... ______________________ The Silent Sound of Dreams With a silent sound Dreams travel my mind, Locked away in meanings That never really come around. The vastness of space Held with a distant vision, Unlocked in a prism That once held me transfixed...

this is a lovely poem! i read it several times, and each time i noticed something different that gave me pause. one of my favorite stanzas was the fifth one: "This place that I glimpsed stood apart, in reality, an oasis for the weary. Seemingly a mirage, though it was not however it...

no prob :cool:

it's really all about suspending belief. for i fool myself into believing it mean's different things at different times... well, this is what i do to get those layers of meaning. i take an idea, assign it a vessel (metaphor), and i begin bringing up the mental images and thoughts it gives...

but i'm coming from the heart in those poems... the meaning is found in the many ways you read it. don't you know that i pick up just as many different views of the poems as any. i may know what inspires it, but i get a different feel the many times i read them. so, Meadow, you are absolutely...

It's very important to know where i'm coming from, for it makes many of my poems more beautiful to read and enjoy. You may not know the meanings and still like the poem, when my poems usually have hidden meanings, of which the key lies within the poem itself. it's not necessary to know, but it...

well, of the many forms of poetry that use repeated lines, i decided to go with my favorite of late, the pantoum, for the last two poems. it's really a simple form, that feels elaborate. it just takes a little foresight. let me explain with 'The Storm' you start out with a four line...

The Ocean Sometimes, I drift off in the varied colors of my world, in which I find meaning that transcends my very thoughts. In the varied colors of my world, I explore many far-fetched notions that transcend my very thoughts, like a boat afloat in the ocean. I explore many far-fetched...

well, it was altogether lovely, and your dreams brought froth something wonderful.