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It's good to point typos out to an author, since the author will often read right past them, because the author knows how it's SUPPOSED to be.:D JohnB

I liked it, you've really given it spirit. The meter seemed off in a couple of places, but I'm just a hack at poetry; maybe someone who knows could advise. Little suggestions: You spell Nightingale differently in the title. And I think "fragile, fleeing melodies" should be "fleeting...

Occam's Razor. It would be a lot easier to make a 10 second spoof, based on a real event, than to fool the entire world . I was around back then and saw an Apollo lift-off. I also watched the moon-landing (from a bar in Mexico, where I translated for the non-English speakers) and it was a LOT...

If you want writing advice and suggestions, go to http://www.ralan.com and take the writing links route to writing advice. If you want ideas, you need to think them up. Also, anything can be a conflict if it bothers the protagonist. JohnB

I also felt it was a bit overdone. And the breeze is parting the curtains yet they are still? It jarred, as did "gutted" - maybe extinguished. It's good writing but too much symbolism for the short piece. IMHO Take care, JohnB

I don't think much of the first one, only because that theme has been overdone. The others I like a lot, especially 3. JohnB

Hey, all, My publisher, Tyree Campbell of Sam's Dot Publishing, has nominated my novel, Friends in Dark Places in many categories of this poll, including SF novel and Horror novel, and I'm nominated in the Author category. I'd appreciate any votes at http://www.critters.org/predpoll/...

I enjoyed your photographic witticism, Stewart, even if everyone else missed it. JohnB

Val, be glad you know an old man who lives in the country. You need to put a small trash can in your room and put in a trash bag. Bait it with your usual messy room stuff for several nights. Mousy will get in every night and crawl out on the bag. After you're sure he's doing this, put the...

Ahh, yes, maybe the dog part does need a little work, but it's an apt metaphor. We have a little pony (Henry) living with us now as a companion to an aging quarterhorse and he went into the tack room while I was filling feed buckets (since he's small enough to fit). I moved my hand to push his...

Actually, he's about 27-29, lives with his mother (dad is dead) and has been unemployed for a couple of years. He does not have a driver's license. I've seen 2 of his "films," 1 was awful, the other (a fan-flick Ghostbusters parody) was only miserable. Just joking, it was just good, clean fun...

I did enjoy it and my suggestions were just things to think about - to show you how someone else -me, in this case-might have went with it. But you have a good, strong voice to your writing and it should remain your own and distinctive. But PULLEASE lose the "decease":D

Just had a thought, Val. You can be the hyena. I'll change the story so she spits him out, since he tastes like shit. And, you're right, I think it's obvious I'm the chimp. Let's see, who wants to be gazelle, lion, and giraffe?

I strongly disagree. The first persons responding to his initial posts only said that his writing was difficult to understand. Anyone who posts on a writer's forum must expect SOME criticism. His attacks are not only baseless, they are outside reality. My work has been posted here and on...

You made me laugh. Val, none of [U]us[U] are animals, we are but metaphors for sanity. The mousex shall consume himself. Merry Christmas.

Ves, I'm not really a poet, my poetry tends to run to word play and humor, but may I suggest that you're forcing it. If you'd really like constructive criticism, let me make some suggestions, since we've come to know each other a bit, now. "Submit," he says as I cower beneath a thin shawl...

Actually, I agree with you, in one sense, Poppy. His postings sometimes make a bit of sense and I empathise with some of his evocative, rambling musings. I actually was considering complimenting him on a couple of things, even though they needed a rewrite or 80. Yet I urge you to read all of...

Sure, but the hardback version is out of print and manuscriptx used the paperback edition to wipe his ass (which is just below his nose) so you'll have to copy, paste and print. Just be sure to put my name on it; I certainly want credit for this one. Take care and Merry Christmas from a...

I grew up near La La land, but moved away nearly 40 years ago. I'm one of the original Disney characters. I'm putting mx on ignore; I've had my fun. Have a great Christmas.