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Turkey You don't like my turkey? That's okay. I was just floored that someone would slam another's website on a WRITERS' forum. I didn't think this site had anything at all to do with web design. There's a big difference between constructive criticism between writers and personal assaults...

Ohmygod, I take it back. I visited your website and, although I'm too much of a gentleman to call anything "terrible," as you did, you have no basis for criticism. As for my writing, many editors have accepted my work and, as I posted many examples of my writing on that site, I take your...

Thanks for your input. I'll rethink it. JohnB

I'd suggest Ender's Game by Orson Scott Card, if his reading skills are adequate. JohnB

Daniel, I finished my first novel about six years ago, sent it (3 ch) to a major publisher and received a hand written note replying: "I enjoyed this but only work through agents. You need to get one." (not exact quote.) I e-mailed and snail-mailed agents by the dozen and couldn't get...

Aah, I didn't see the signature "female Steven King." I'm the alternate Steven King, born on the same day, 9-21-47. You've got to get the details down pat. If you don't know about guns, research on the internet. I'm doing a book now that has to deal with meteorites and their effect. It...

Good writing and quite interesting. I'd like a bit more description of the characters but otherwise no problems on my part. Take care, JohnB

Darth, I realize that I, as a reader, are coming in at the middle of something, which makes it difficult to critique. It was also difficult to read, with run-on sentences and improper use (or lack) of commas. Also the paragraphs run on with more than one idea. Especially in dialogue...

All valid comments, Stewart, and I thank you. I also agree about more description, but I had to cut this from a 123,000 word novel down to less tnan 100k (It came in at approx. 94,000) and the prologue is only to introduce the creature, so it's "bare-bones." And you're right on about using...

Okay, I checked. It's printed correctly in the hardcopy of the book, yet is not correct on my laptop or home PC. Yet the book was printed from an attachment e-mailed to my publisher from my laptop. Go figure! JohnB

Ohmygawd, this thing has been through dozens of rewrites, a writers' group and two editors. How could we have missed it? You are totally correct; "be" is missing. The only explanation (excuse) that I can come up with is that the Word program had a glitch that replaced e's with g's, left out...

This is the prologue of my recently-released novel. I don't mind criticism or suggestions in the least, so have at it. JohnB Friends in Dark Places by John Bushore Prologue Tonight would perfect for UFO watching, Jimmy Paxton thought as he relaxed in his tent, fully dressed...

I'll comment, although it's a bit difficult to critique only a portion of a work (or maybe this is the end, but it doesn't feel like it.) The writing is good and also strong, though I was totally lost at the end when you lapsed from present to past tense, wondering if I was supposed to...

I live very close to the Great Swamp National Wildlife Refuge!!! \ Yeah, well, um, your swamp might be great, but mine is great AND Dismal. And Indian legend says the lake in the middle (Lake Drummond) was created by a fiery bird. And Edgar Allen Poe wrote a poem about it. And it was part...

I'm from Virginia, living on the edge of the Great Dismal Swamp on land reclaimed from the swamp by the Dismal Swamp Canal back in 1805, which makes my bio more interesting, especially for horror stories..

I'm new to this site, as of today. I've been writing for a dozen years or so, but I finally joined a writers' group six years ago and got serious about it. I finished my first novel 4 years ago and sent 3 chapters to Ace/Bantam. The editor said he enjoyed them, but I had to get an agent...

Hello I'm new to the forum. I looked around and it seems like a great place to see what readers are up to, which is good for a writer, even though I'm from the other side of the pond. Mostly, I write suspense novels but with a paranormal or SF twist of some sort. I've done short stories and...

Anansi Boys I also listened to the CD of Anansi Boys, and Lenny Henry's vocal talents actually added to the story. I listen to CD books because I drive a lot and if I have spare time when not driving, I want to be writing my own stuff. My laptop and I are inseparable. JohnB