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Sorry Hari, didn't quite get into your story. Perhaps you could work on the beginning, something to draw one, something sharp and snapping? It reads like a history book. The first paragraph has a lot of interesting material, but I don't really want to read more - you need to make me. Say you...

Thanks, Ell. Gave me insight, I was floating a bit.

Welcome to the forum :)

I'd be asking for peaches, Infinity, if I were you. Mushy, squishy everywhere, beware! Welcome to the forum! :)

Interesting talent there. Welcome to the forum. :)

It does read far better now. Are you published?

swoons in a faint.

Sharp phrases, quite good. As soon as I read it, Eglington, I felt many important chunks were missing and the reading was jagged - until I read your complete version in the Green Room. The second paragraph was lost on me as my french's zip. It is an interesting tale, quite well written, the...

Brilliant poem! You take a bit away from it, though, by not breaking it up in stanzas, therefore one keeps scrolling down, hoping it will end soon. Get some powerful break points and you have dynamite. You do write well.

'Ray to books! Welcome to the forum.

True. Lynch's in Melbourne. Try carting a bambini, they have a court ruling to show - framed on the wall. The food is heaven, atmosphere romantic to the toenail. You won't leave without a proposal, not necessarily marriage!

Bobby (now, you must stop flirting. Man for you, my foot), Novella (If you don't fight today, you'll never fight again) - but thanks. Both Fugue explanations are of extreme illumination. Didn't donate blood, ram into a bulldozer or Tom Hanks. My only claim to fame, is that I had a moment of...

I don't smoke. The one time I tried it, a clumsy puppy, fat little teen, my dad calmly persuaded against it. Almost broke my legs. I respect Australia for not allowing smoking in restaurants (they even have baby-free ones), as it can be annoying if one is not a smoker and, by jove, some...

Given the darts and gloves above, it seems a bit silly beginning this post with 'I joined the forum because...' Strangely, I was researching on publishers and Ask Jeeves brought me here. Darren's obviously well connected. :cool: Finding this site, I wasn't displeased. A lot of users...

What's a fugue medium? I get spurts of writing, prose. Never poetry.

Hey! Do you have a vibrant vibralto?

It is impressive, novella. Tightly written too and reads rather well. Good imagery.

Welcome to the forum :)

What publishing house, JBug?

Very brave of you, Bathory.