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Funny, somebody tried to kill me with a car once. Same with Sharon Osbourne, trying to kill Ozzy, right? Not so implausible, then, huh?

The thing is, this person probably wrote this on word processor, with italics and all, and pasted it here. In which case the italics wouldn't be in effect automatically as you have to do them yourself. Same with indents, bold, underlines, font, sizes ... You catch my drift?

But something else does that for him. From Stig's pocket, a little voice protrudes. "Hey, you! Shut up with ya questions! My name's Tommy!" Poppy looks amazed, stupid and scared at the same time. She realises that the cigarette was in the same pocket as this "Tommy" thing or whatever...

Hi everyone. For an assignment, I was told to produce a "scary setting," so I decided to create a kind of foreshadow in the weather, then use to weather itself to destroy... Please tell me what you think! Scary Setting I remember it clearly. It was all … in layers, I suppose. Yes...

to - quite dramatically - plonk

Wow. I can't believe it. I bought Intensity today and so far I have read 20 pages. Already I am gripped, which I know would probably sound stupid to the people that have read this book considering nothing of particular importance has happened. But the way Koontz has described Chyna's...

Well, there are certainly some mixed opinions! :p Thanks for all your help. From what I have noted from other forums, it seems that Intensity seems to be a good place to start -- so I will read this first. Thanks again.

I am considering reading this book so if anyone has read it please comment. If you do not like it, please could you give me another recommendation for Koontz ... I'm interested in reading his books and would like a good starting point. Thanks! ;) :p

Thanks Halo! In my edited version, this was corrected ("It's" to "Its") because as soon as I had completed the extract I immediately put it on this forum so I'd know exactly what to change! :)

Wow! That was a lot better than I expected! Thank you for your comments. :p

Here is an exract I wrote when I was bored ... please criticise all you like and tell me what you think. Thanks! :) By the yellow candlelight she saw the head distinctly, hovering in mid air above her. At least, it seemed to be hovering, attached to a frail, almost non-existent body that...

That's a very good point. The problem with me, as you have realised, is that I am too long winded and end up saying what should be left to the reader's imagination. The points you have made have really helped me, and I am going to take them under serious consideration next time! :o

Oooh, and Novella! I thought your version was excellent! :)

No, probably not! As I said, I didn't think this was very good, and I am glad that others have 'backed up' my opinion. Perhaps it would look better on-screen, but I think all this is a bit of a cliche, and if I wanted to grab the reader's attention I should do something more original. Or...

Thanks a lot! That was really helpful! :)

Hi everyone! In this extract of the story I am producing, I was trying to create serious tension between the two characters. I don't think it is very good ... it certainly isn't the best I can do ... so I was hoping for some harsh critism and things that can help me! Thanks a lot: Jason...

Hmmmm. Once more, I cannot comment on the religious aspect of your poem, so I think I'll leave that aside. But what I will comment on is your sense of rhythm, rhyme and style. I like the consistency with a rhyme after each line, it really sets a good pace. The syllables are about equal in...

- yet bittery - taste that

Once again, I am very impressed with what you have written. Well done. And ... umm ... have faith. :p

leeches, crawling up it.