Daniel_Infinity
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Hey, I was hoping I could get some opinions on writing style before I go completely crazy.
1.
"Hi Sarah, I'm Jordan." Jordan says. He extends his hand. Sarah looks at him awkwardly.
"Um, I'm busy." She replies, pushing away his hand. Jordan feels crushed.
2.
"Hi Sarah, I'm Jordan." Jordan said. He extended his hand. Sarah looked at him awkwardly.
"Um, I'm busy." She replied, and pushed away his hand. Jordan felt crushed.
Thanks,
Daniel
1.
"Hi Sarah, I'm Jordan." Jordan says. He extends his hand. Sarah looks at him awkwardly.
"Um, I'm busy." She replies, pushing away his hand. Jordan feels crushed.
2.
"Hi Sarah, I'm Jordan." Jordan said. He extended his hand. Sarah looked at him awkwardly.
"Um, I'm busy." She replied, and pushed away his hand. Jordan felt crushed.
Thanks,
Daniel