Recent content by David Frame

Feedback I've just read the feedback guidelines and I would more than welcome any feedback (whatsoever) on the snippets that I've posted. Thanks in advance to anybody who takes the time, it's greatly appreciated!!!!!!!

The Tavoli Social Club (Part 2) continued... The man that stood before him was dark skinned, but not dark dark, more milk chocolate, Asia dark. A blue baseball cap rested atop of his head while the rest of his body was wrapped in cream pyjamas, the kind favoured by middle to upper income...

I've just started a book based in heaven about a murdered guy named Bruno who is tasked with solving his own death. Any feedback on the first few chapters is welcome (I'm up tp Chapter 14): ONE When was dead not dead? When it was still life? Was it when the blood continued to rush and the...

Read everything he's written and, in my opinion, his Myron Bolitar books are his best work. I've also exchanged emails with him a few times - a genuine guy by the sounds of it. First Class Author!!!!!!!!

I thought Kane and Abel and The Eleventh Commandment by Jeffrey Archer were excellent reads. I also liked Angels and Demons by Dan Brown. Who can have a pop at JKR, she's made hundreds of millions!!! Sure, people hate these books and/or authors, but they are popular for a reason. The same...

I think I've been here for a few months now, so I can't comment on the befores. But, a pal of mine came on, promoted my (first attempt at a ...) book and he got slated - huge argument come bun fight. I came on, took a bucket full of personal crap, kind of rode it out and then got some...

Apologies at dragging this back onto topic, but even though I appreciate Tom Clancy books, his detail just gets on my wick. I tend to speed read/skip the parts where he describes in detail the technical compilation of the weapon at hand. I don't think that Clancy needs this to authenticate his...

You can click the link for the fourth chapter!!!

Hello and welcome. I agree, don't worry about the age. I'm nearly 30 and I'm still below average with my literary skills. I have a post of my work in Writers Showcase - take a look. You should put your work in there as well because you get good feedback from the people here!!!!

Local businesses, such as bars, grocers, and bakeries sit here comfortably alongside the newer introductions to the economy I liked it, great description. The only thing I would comment on is that you refer to the place first of all as "it" as in the first quote, but secondly as "here" as in...

Yes, but the ninety one year old in the plot has to be killed off before he sits in judgement on a major case. The people who want him dead can't rest on the assumption that he'll die before he hears the case. Basically, what Grisham is showing us is that the old man had his second stroke...

And married people :o

I agree entirely, but sometimes the plot calls for the author to get to the point. Everything isn't about moving the plot forward, occassionally it's about subconsiously giving the reader a bit more history or a bit more detail that makes them feel they know the character deeper by knowing some...

His Myron Bolitar books are better. I actually read the book you quoted from a few months back, and although it's not bad, it is the only time he's written deliberately in this instructive style. I sense that you prefer to have the picture painted rather than instructed???

Jeffrey Deaver's main stuff is his Lincoln Rhyme detective/thriller series. The first one is the 'Bone Collector' but 'The Vanished Man' is far and away the best of the lot - an excellent book and an absolute for me. Harlan Coben has a series of thrillers based on a sports agent called Myron...