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PART I DREAMS For those who dare to dream, there is a whole world to win! - Dhirubhai Ambani CHAPTER 1 Panting, screaming, gnashing of teeth, cries in the night. Desperate cries of panic and fatigue. Burning, tingling, crawling, and itching. Brief whiffs of hot burning flesh...

Nice I would love to comment further about your writing but I'm not really one to crtique. I did however find that it was interesting and well put together. I do find that you may as they always tell me here need to let your character tell the story. I'm thinking that maybe her accounts of...

Wow Well this is interesting. Thanks for the stick up sirmyk but I really don't recall Motokid pointing out much spelling errors. Mostly the errors in spelling were called to my attention by stewart i think. It really urks him that I mispelled the word prolouge. anyway like motokid stated in...

Again Point taken Thanks for the advice stewart

Point Taken I totally understand what you mean and where you're coming from. Like I have stated before at least half of the novel is written and untouched. I plan not to have anyone crtique it. I will do my own revisions. The only thing I can't seem to get right is the opening of the book...

Answer to Motokid's questions Well Motokid I think that my story will always be mine. Before I even post something for feedback I kind of have ideas of what needs to be changed. Yes I write and re-write alot always using my first idea. Thats what some writers do. I want it to be perfect. I...

Thanks so much for the advice I actually got the same advice from someone else but she said to cut off a lot of the first part and start with "The rain continued to bear down on his back. The back pack, swung over his shoulder, was getting increasingly heavy. He glanced at his watch, and...

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I agree I agree Novella. It's up to the writer if he of she decides to use the advice then do so, but the whole point of posting your work is to get some feed back. If you don't agree and your hurt by it, then you don't have to take the advice. Nor do you have to post anymore if you don't feel...

Taking Critisism is hard I think once a writer or should I say aspiring writer opens up to strangers for input on their work, they don't always expect bad comments. Everyone thinks there work is good. Especially when you've worked so hard at putting your thoughts on paper. However I do think...

Cool Thanks again cajunmomma Its cool that your not that far from. Very cool. I have worked some agency shifts before at the hospital in Franklin in the ICU. Very small. Anyway thanks for the pointers I will try to make it better. Hopefully everyone one day will approve. One day I'll do it all...

Thanks guys Taking a piss? Thanks once again everyone for your professional sound advice. Prolouge Prolouge Prolouge Prolouge Prolouge Prolouge!! Sorry for the mispell its truly just a finger slip. Stew your advice means alot and thanks for it. I can tell your good at what you do. I...

New Prolouge The night was dark and dreary. Not a single star in the sky. No moonlight to guide his path. The killer, dressed in his black hooded robe, made his way down the streets of the oaks. The Oaks was a quiet residential neighborhood, filled with middle classed residents, of Ville...

Thanks Thanks so much cajun momma! Glad to know there are more of us out there. Where are you from. I live in Abbeville but I'm orignally from Ville Platte. I'm a nurse over at Our Lady of Lourdes. I am in the process of reconstructing my novel Gifts of Lethal Exchange. Read on below and tell...

Very deep I can't offer up much advice on your writing especially since my opinions on this forum are not respected by many, but I thought it was put together well. I can feel the pain of the addict as if I were one myself. Keep writing and don't let anyone here tell you that you suck. They...

Thanks again Nathan For the great advice!

Okay Thanks for your valued input

Thanks moto kid Thanks everyone for your valued input.

Oh and one more thing clueless Point well taken concerning the dilect of the phrase passed him up. I will quote it rather than make the narrorator opps mis spelled say it. Thanks