Acolyte
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Same request as always--please comment and critique, good and bad (especially bad, to help me improve). Upon review, this poem has much the same theme and some of the same imagery as the earlier posted "Beach Music," though arising from a completely different event.
Dispatched
By Ross Shingledecker
late August 2004
scrawled on a Wendy's receipt
by the light of the penknife you gave me
on the side of the road at three a.m.
I ceased to exist three mile-markers ago
when the moon- and headlamp-light
began to chase eternally at a blackness;
I accelerate past my exit.
The sharp air that I inhale
is carried by a rhythm in my veins
pumped by an even beat
into and throughout me
even as my solo self dissolves
Those chords have possessed not only me
but also the night itself:
the backlit moon and the dancing stars
move in harmony with the bass rumbling engine,
a chorus blanketed by the pitch of darkness.
I at the center, enveloped too,
briefly sit at the locus
touching and being and hearing them all:
for a moment, made Buddha.
Dispatched
By Ross Shingledecker
late August 2004
scrawled on a Wendy's receipt
by the light of the penknife you gave me
on the side of the road at three a.m.
I ceased to exist three mile-markers ago
when the moon- and headlamp-light
began to chase eternally at a blackness;
I accelerate past my exit.
The sharp air that I inhale
is carried by a rhythm in my veins
pumped by an even beat
into and throughout me
even as my solo self dissolves
Those chords have possessed not only me
but also the night itself:
the backlit moon and the dancing stars
move in harmony with the bass rumbling engine,
a chorus blanketed by the pitch of darkness.
I at the center, enveloped too,
briefly sit at the locus
touching and being and hearing them all:
for a moment, made Buddha.