Double poem--Lustrous Curse and Sorrowed Sinner

[Vespertilio91]

This is a new type of poem for me. It is actually the same thing told by two different points of view.​

Lustrous Curse​

Sorrowed Sinner​

Watching over me,​

This little lady came;​

The nighttime's cruel caress.​

I kissed her soul goodnight.​

Sulking in the dark redeemed,​

For thirst had killed the dame,​

The sultry sinner's kiss.​

But sorrow put it right​

Blinking back the tears,​

I promised her one thing,​

The pain is floating, gone.​

That what I'd do was fine,​

He promised to kill my fears​

But all that hope did bring​

With his unearthly bond.​

Was hate, by the thirst of mine.​

Soothing was his touch,​

She ran off, drained.​

But wonderous was his kiss,​

I'd finished up the job;​

And with my secret hunch​

Now night was her reign​

His love, I'll never miss.​

Because her soul, I robbed.​

Please, the usual...reviews, comments, etc.​

 

[Fieldy]

wow

On there own, they don't make complete sense (i suppose that's the idea) but together they make a complelling poem.

Its intersting how the women feels the victim and has love yet the man feels remorse for his lust. How she thought he was soothing and everything she wanted yet I feel he charmed her completely

 

[Vespertilio91]

Exactly the point. ^^ Did you catch the implying? It's not about what you think.

 

[Fieldy]

I thought it was the decieving of two strangers and unrequited love. love and lust.

Im not sure if i cathed the implying? what did you imply?

 

[Vespertilio91]

I kissed her soul goodnight.
For thirst had killed the dame,

With his unearthly bond.

She ran off, drained.
I'd finished up the job;
Now night was her reign
Because her soul, I robbed.

Look at these lines very carefully. They are the root of the entire poem. The secret is hidden within those lines.

 

[Poppy1]

Vampires, Vesper? Or have I just got vampires on the brain?

 

[Vespertilio91]

Vampires, Vesper? Or have I just got vampires on the brain?

No, I do. You're right, it's the vampyre's kiss. Do you like it?