Frodo Potter, pm Darren (site administrator) and get him to set up a Book Forum competition so one of us can win a free copy of your book. It'll be advertised on the opening page of this forum for one month, and then some lucky person can win your book. It could be a forum member or just a guest who's visiting. If it's a forum member you could ask that person to critique your book.
Of coarse you think the book is special, you wrote it. The description you give about the book does not really pique the interest of the person who reads it. I see from your lulu page the book is only 11 pages long. It sounds like a picture book. Is it?
Here is the preview you get from the lulu web site (no pictures):
Chapter 1
The New Kid
Sam walked into the small little classroom, a hundred strange faces stared back at him. All different colors, some of them were the same color as him. But still they had red, yellow, and black.
Sam felt a hand on his shoulder, he looked at it and noticed the wrinkles on it. He looked up at the teacher, Mrs Linkerpot, she smiled at him and began to speak to the class.
“Class,” she said and waited for them to stop talking and pay attention. “this is Sam, our new student.”
The class was silent as they looked at him, Sam felt as if he was being sized up for a meal.
“Everyone say Hi Sam.”
The class murmured a hello, and some hi’s, one hey. The teacher smiled and showed Sam to his desk. Sam sat down and put his head on his shoulders, sighing.
Sam looked around the classroom, he felt so out of place.
How can you have a "small little classroom", and then have 100 kids in it? Most classrooms never have more than 25 kids. Some places have laws that prevent 100 kids in a classroom. Maybe you meant it felt like 100 faces, but that's not what you said. The idea that there might be 100 kids in a classroom might scare a young kid to death at the thought of going to school.
"But still they had red, yellow, and black." This is a pretty awkward sentence. Thinking like a small kid, what do you think they will visualize when they hear that there may be kids in this school with yellow, red and black faces? Who exactly has a yellow or red face?
"Sam sat down and put his head on his shoulders, sighing." Exactly how does one put their head on thier shoulders? Do you mean he put his head down on his desk? This (head on shoulders) is physically impossible isn't it? I can't touch my head to my shoulders.
I hope you don't take this as an attack. It's not meant to be. I'm just trying to figure out what's special about your book. If it's a picture book I would really like to see some of the illustrations. It might make the story more interesting.
