When He Smiles

[wickychick1991]

When he smiles, I see a rainbow
When he frowns, it starts to rain
When he yells, I hear the thunder
When he smiles, skies are blue
When he laughs, the blue birds sing
When he's sad, the lone wolf howls
When he smiles, the world is peaceful
When he's with me, everything is perfect

Let me know what you think!

 

[Vespertilio91]

I'm sorry, wicky, but I just did not like this poem at all. I felt it to be a little too redundant and not very thoughtful. No I don't mean that it isn't a good poem, I just think that it is not written well, and that it sounds like a typical romantic poem. It expresses the thoughts behind it too openly; it doesn't let anything to be inferred. It requires little thought process, and I find this style poetry to be a bit boring. I'm sorry I cannot say anything positive except that I've liked much else that you've written.