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Ive read the first story opening, but unfortunately do not have time to read the above at the moment. The story begining is intresting and I would certainly have read more had it been avalible. Well done.

I've read the the story (well not all, I only played it twice as I failed the first time :eek: ) Some good ideas in there, just a shame its not longer :cool: might i also sujest you have a quick look at the vocabulary that you have used, if it is for children. ie "frivolously" Well...

Will more people please post coments about my story opening, any at all?

There is a problem here, and the "your father" does not feel natural when repeated, though this may just be me. ok start, when i get the chance i will read onwards.

Thanks for that, no wonder I thought I was going crazy when I was certain i had seen an edit button earlier :confused: - for once i wasn't actually going mad! :eek: And thank you Stephie for the encouragement - I am currently working on more, and you never know, I might post some more...

Darkness - could only be broken by light Silence - could only be broken by sound Glass - could only be broken by me Sam - will be broken by mum. by sam (me) Not a great result, but only 27 words in a 5 minute break, well i enjoyed it anyway :)

Thanks, that is noted and I would adjust it on this topic but cant find how to edit a post. Is it possable? :confused: I'll post it here instead: Even the stars hid themselves from it. Hope faded as darkness grew, its inky black roots creeping over every soul. Yet hope, however small it may...

I was at home and board so i desided to try my hand at writing. this is what i have so far come up with, just the opening. Please read, enjoy, and let me know what you think :) Even the stars hid themselves from it. Hope faded as darkness grew, its inky black roots creeping over every soul...