Stella Leanna
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I have to admit that was a really lame title for a thread. Haha.
I wanted to share with you two poems I wrote, both about relationships. Tragic ones, both involving death. What IS IT with me and death poems?!.. I was just in the mood, really. Comments, suggestions, anything, please! So I can improve. =)
Poem#1:
The End of my Sufferings
The grief you have given me resides in my veins
And the love you’ve once provided me now slowly wanes.
Leaving me in this pit of nothing but consternation…
Darkly looking at me and placing me in damnation.
You’re the man I thought I knew but unfortunately, no I don’t…
Longing for your desire to show compassion although you won’t.
Suddenly reminding me of times you treat me like vermin,
Leaving me on the cold dark streets, you left me into mourning.
You mercilessly ate my flesh, deprived me of my soul,
Spitting out all the bones of remorse, but now I scream no more!
I’m holding a dagger and sadly I’m tilting at the end of the line.
But were you there to stop me? No… now I’m burning up inside.
I fall in a whirlpool, filled with the haunting, lasting memories.
I gradually am saved from the dark… from the torture of your intimacies.
Poem#2:
His Mistake
Looking at himself in the mirror
Definitely feeling much worse than before
His voice echoing in his empty room,
Calling for someone to save him from doom.
His hands dripping in crimson red,
The terrible guilt swelling in his head
Remembering the girl screaming for her life
As he approached her threateningly with a knife.
Slashing furiously, looking for console
It was only in this girl that he found home
Wanting in his arms forevermore,
He'll kill her and possess her soul.
And the evil deed accomplished at last
His feeling of dread starting to amass
He possesses her body, her remains locked away
But he's unable to bring back a single happy day.
You will notice most of my poems are dark. I'm trying to experiment with the way Norah Jones writes her songs... I'll share my works with you when I'm not too ashamed, haha.
I wanted to share with you two poems I wrote, both about relationships. Tragic ones, both involving death. What IS IT with me and death poems?!.. I was just in the mood, really. Comments, suggestions, anything, please! So I can improve. =)
Poem#1:
The End of my Sufferings
The grief you have given me resides in my veins
And the love you’ve once provided me now slowly wanes.
Leaving me in this pit of nothing but consternation…
Darkly looking at me and placing me in damnation.
You’re the man I thought I knew but unfortunately, no I don’t…
Longing for your desire to show compassion although you won’t.
Suddenly reminding me of times you treat me like vermin,
Leaving me on the cold dark streets, you left me into mourning.
You mercilessly ate my flesh, deprived me of my soul,
Spitting out all the bones of remorse, but now I scream no more!
I’m holding a dagger and sadly I’m tilting at the end of the line.
But were you there to stop me? No… now I’m burning up inside.
I fall in a whirlpool, filled with the haunting, lasting memories.
I gradually am saved from the dark… from the torture of your intimacies.
Poem#2:
His Mistake
Looking at himself in the mirror
Definitely feeling much worse than before
His voice echoing in his empty room,
Calling for someone to save him from doom.
His hands dripping in crimson red,
The terrible guilt swelling in his head
Remembering the girl screaming for her life
As he approached her threateningly with a knife.
Slashing furiously, looking for console
It was only in this girl that he found home
Wanting in his arms forevermore,
He'll kill her and possess her soul.
And the evil deed accomplished at last
His feeling of dread starting to amass
He possesses her body, her remains locked away
But he's unable to bring back a single happy day.
You will notice most of my poems are dark. I'm trying to experiment with the way Norah Jones writes her songs... I'll share my works with you when I'm not too ashamed, haha.
