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TerishD, I think you were being a little too harsh ... I really liked it, Duvodas! I really thought you created a fantastic atmosphere, which is something I envy as I am not as good at it myself. Your sense of description was very vivid, and your imagery was ... spellbinding. Well done...

. Mysteriously, however, the leeches

otherwise your bones will

enormous rollercoaster that was

. The boy decided to

some blood-sucking leeches that

constantly stamped on it

Thank you, very much.

My World Glass. It shimmers Like the sun on a stream. I look down below And watch my city gleam. In the palm of my hand Are the world and its people And I’m up here In my castle Or steeple. I have all my money. I have all my fame. I have all its luxuries But they’re just The...

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Thanks ValkyrieRaven88 :) In the poem I was trying to show how, when fear is increased, we start to dismiss niceties that we may have wished for earlier, and end up caring only for your life. When the footsteps stop, it is a sudden change, and the narrator is scared by this. They know...

This is my latest work, please, please comment! Everything you say is helpful! Thanks. Footsteps Footsteps. Please, no more. I couldn’t deal With another slam, A tumble to the floor. Footsteps. Please, don’t roar. My ears are hurting – Really bad – And they’re hurting more and...

Personally, I think the poem has good features: the rhythm is good and the rhyme at the end (flame, again) really works well and has great impact. However, the poem itself ... I just don't understand it really. I think the writer knows what they are trying to express, but it's just not...

Hello everyone! I was just wondering if anybody here has read Velocity by Dean Koontz, as it looked very intriguing to me when I picked it up in the shop. If anybody has, please tell me what it is like so that I will know whether to pick it up or not next time! Thanks!

Hi everyone! I have been writing a story for more than a year now, and it is called (if you haven't guessed already) Darkest Vengeance. So far I'm 81 pages in, which I know isn't a lot but I have almost given up on it. I'm trying not to, though! Anyway, this is the prologue. The prologue...

Please I'm Sorry Mummy, Mummy, on the wall, Who is the safest one of all? "You are, darling," she would say, She'd tell me - quick - to run away. But Dad would scream And rage and shout And thrash and stab and stamp and clout. He'd keep her pinned, Against the wall, With no peace...

Hi Stigmatic I very much like the way you re-create and show us the boy's panic in the second line using the words, "flailing and thrashing". It really gives us, as readers, a clear picture of the boy on flames. To improve, I suggest that you give the readers the opportunity to 'read...

Hi everyone! I have made up a poem please tell me what you think! Creak ... Oh dear. A sound on the stair. I could tell mummy, but she won't care. She'll say there's no monsters, She'll say go to bed, She'll tell me and tell me It's all in my head. Shivering and squirming, I try to...

Well, I have just finished Thorn, and it was great. It's your typical crime/thriller story with loads of twists. The only difference in this book is that the crimes involve kids/teenagers, and some nasty stuff goes on in that area... Anyway, it was a great read! Recommended for people who...